Storms in the Night

We’re expecting a pretty nasty rain storm to start tonight. It inspired my latest poem in a form that’s new to me- a nocturna.

Night StormNighttime Tempest

The outcast sun retreats behind the clouds
then whimpers to the ground to end its day.
Above, the roiling sky of tempest shrouds
will deafen ears and blast away with light.
Dear Lord please take this wicked storm away
for it’s a beast that stalks me in the night.
The driving rains are pounding on my roof
while thunder roars as if it wants to stay.
I trust you, Lord, why do you ask for proof?

I stumbled into a poetry challenge blog while reading one of purplepeninportland’s lovely poems. The challenge, at Imaginary Frogs with Real Toads, called for a “nocturna”.

Not having ever heard of that form, I was immediately interested. The rhyming scheme and origins of the form are quite enticing. I decided to stick with some of the poem’s origins and write about a storm in the night, mixing in a prayer as perhaps the originals may have done.

the imaginary garden with real toads

About ewdupler

Gene is an avid outdoorsman, loves reading and is known to put pen to paper (well, he types) as an amateur poet.
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9 Responses to Storms in the Night

  1. aprille says:

    Hiya Gene,
    Full of sound and fury.
    Very neatly packaged.

    • ewdupler says:

      Thank you! Both for the compliment and the editorial double-check. I got so carried away with the upcoming rain that I forgot one of the apostrophes.

  2. “Outcast Sun” I love that. I feel the storm’s fury..the fear and the prayer. Nice work!

  3. Wow this is powerful and true to the Nocturna form – good job!!!

  4. Grace says:

    Storms at night are terrifying. I like this part:
    Above, the roiling sky of tempest shrouds
    will deafen ears and blast away with light.

    Lovely work with the rhyming pattern and you got the linked words too – day/away/stay ~

    Thank you for linking up with Real Toads and hope to see more you in the garden ~

    Have a good week ~

  5. Akila says:

    oh very powerful and scary too! the concerns are voiced here loud and clear when natures fury unleashes itself!

  6. From the title on, you have truly caught this form beautifully.

  7. Very beautifully penned !!

  8. grapeling says:

    Well caught and spun, Gene. ~ M

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