Reaching Out: The Ring

There is no referee in this ring and you don’t get to know the rules until you break one. Worse, your opponent is also your partner. Every uppercut, every swing, every hook you land might score points, but each strike hurts you in the end. So you put your hands up and hope that you just don’t get hit.

Accompanied by regret, you step outside. They quietly join you, reaching out to hold your hand. “I’m sorry” heals better than any ice pack, but you’re still both battered and bruised. You’ll both need to learn before one of you walks away from the ring.

Wicked storms raging
Thunder bellows, lightning strikes
Silence intervenes

This poem, written in the form of a haibun, is fictional.  While it’s made up, I think that it’s something we can all relate to.  After all, who hasn’t had a fight with a loved one that they regret?  And what fight with a loved one doesn’t hurt you, too?

I wrote this in response to the prompt at dVerse.  I’m new at this form, so I hope I’ve done it justice.

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About ewdupler

Gene is an avid outdoorsman, loves reading and is known to put pen to paper (well, he types) as an amateur poet.
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9 Responses to Reaching Out: The Ring

  1. hayesspencer says:

    Yes! You did this justice. The poem at the end hits hard and the last line of the haibun packs in succinct wisdom. I hope you will join us again for Haibun Monday and other prompts. If you want to read more about the form, search haibun on our site and check out Haibun #1 and Haibun #7 for some different perspectives. Being an outdoorsman I think will add an interesting viewpoint to your work. Thank you so much for responding to this prompt and your take on it.

  2. Mary says:

    Yes, “I am sorry” heals more than any ice pack. And yes, I do think sometimes silence IS healing. After the “I am sorry” takes away that initial sting.

  3. So nice to “meet” you. This is a very well-executed haibun and an effective metaphorical write.

  4. Sumana Roy says:

    “I am sorry” is the best path to tread on and reach out to the loved ones…love this haibun….

  5. whimsygizmo says:

    LOVE the correlation between the fight ring, and lightning and thunder. Perfect.

  6. The metaphor of boxing is actually very efficient.. I read it more like that than fiction and real.. Being bruised is alas too common

  7. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says:

    Yes, I think we do all know it.

  8. “And what fight with a loved one doesn’t hurt you, too?” So true…even when we don’t realize it at first. We can definitely lose our true selves “in the ring”. I enjoyed your haibun. 🙂

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