Coffee Couple

I See
Something Special
Before me This morning
In a green cup The black liquid
Aroma wafting Drawing me nearer
Opening eyes Breaking slumber
Realize Wasn’t mine
Empty Lost chance
You! Gone!

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Day 15 of NaPoWriMo – Halfway! ย And being halfway, the theme today is doubles. ย I chose to wrote a double ninette. ย The doubling is my idea while the ninette is a pretty standard form. ย I wrote them to be able to stand alone, but hopefully they’re double-good together!

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About ewdupler

Gene is an avid outdoorsman, loves reading and is known to put pen to paper (well, he types) as an amateur poet.
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5 Responses to Coffee Couple

  1. Haha this is awesome! ๐Ÿ˜€

    Also, did you intend for the format to kind of build the anticipation down the poem? ๐Ÿ™‚ Because that was very different!

    • ewdupler says:

      Thanks, I’m glad you enjoyed it! I intended to build up as it progressed since that seems to be a natural part of the ninette’s form. I had more syllables to work with to elaborate on the story. But when I got half way and had to reduce the syllable count, I was stuck. That’s when I decided that a twist at the end would be fun, especially since it paralleled real life as I was writing.

      I woke up early and staggered to the office to write where my SO was sitting beside me. She was drinking wonderfully smelling coffee out of a green cup while I pondered today’s prompt. By the end of my writing, she polished off the coffee just as I finished the poem!

      • Hahaha that’s quite literal then, your poem! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ if you were stuck for syllables it doesn’t show at all- the progression is very smooth, lol. And so silently melodramatic too at the end- oh dear! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

  2. Vin says:

    Wow, I have never seen anything like this before..
    Love it! The ending was quite unexpected.

  3. whimsygizmo says:

    Love this! ๐Ÿ™‚

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